FF 100 Word Stories – The Way We Were…


 

He died in Afghanistan.

I was always the wild one, but you know what they say about opposites attract. He used to read me beautiful poetry. I used to shout slogans for our cause. He bailed me out of jail. I’d told him we deserved a bailing out party.

“Your pompous patriach and his anti feminist flunky are gone for two days!” I told him.

Probably my idea to put toothpaste in the  ice cream too, and then to have the ice cream fight.”That’s the last straw!” his mother had shouted, arriving home. “The military for you, son!” said his father. Wrong war, you bastard. 

melting-wax-renee-heath femenFor FF 100W stories – run admirably by Rochelle  picture by the incomparable  Renee – extra picture of ”narrator” taken of a FEMEN  activist for women’s rights, on location, the only ‘Feminista’ group I wholeheartedly support.

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20 thoughts on “FF 100 Word Stories – The Way We Were…

  1. Afghanistan – Vietnam – the Somme – the 100 years Wat – will people never stop killing each other?

  2. I feel sorry for him. He couldn’t get anything right no matte what he did.
    Nicely done.
    Phyllis

  3. Such a touching story and sad that it is so realistic. Well done!

  4. Sad story. Too many people dead. Bad dad.

  5. I love the way you captured their youth, it made it more poignant when it was stolen.

  6. I love the way you created their personalities in such a short time (which is all we have, of course), allowing us to identify with them and the pain that came later. Beautifully done.

    “Bailing-out” and “anti-feminist” need hyphens, giving you two extra words (not that you need them.) :-)

    janet

  7. Incredibly vibrant – one of the best I’ve read from you.

  8. You contrasted the characters perfectly. And the end beat? Took my breath away. Well done.

  9. Good, realistic story, Hamish. I sometimes wonder how many of the young guys in ROTC where I went to college made it back from Viet Nam. Well written.

    Susan

  10. Great imagery in a story that is sadly true for too many. Well done

  11. You paint such a vivid portrait of their relationship and personalities in just a few words. Phenomenal story.

  12. Oh, friendships…the essence of our lives. Beautifully touching story.

  13. A sad story but all too true for so many people. You captured a lot of feeling in 100 words

  14. And it could have been the second world war for an even older generation…

  15. Dear Managua/Hamish ;)

    You could’ve said “he died in Viet Nam” and it would have been a slice of my history. Well done, thoughtful piece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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